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Review:tangledconstellations says:
Oof, is it hot in here?!

This chapter was so needed, I didn't even realise until I'd finished it. It was honestly the perfect Lily/Sev moment ever in history ever. She is so hurt, and so lonely, but at the same time, I don't think she should regret this as much as undoubtedly she will. It's not the same as a rebound one night stand with someone you've met once - and, I don't know, maybe that makes it a little more serious and more confusing. But the fact that it happened speaks ounces, and Sev...! He didn't know what to do, and it was all so perfect and, oh. No, I have NO screaming issues with this fic right now. I am not hating on Lily or on Sev...so I think you've written this perfectly!

There really is something so completely mesmerising about your writing style. In fact, it really honestly makes me so envious, because every chapter is crafted so well and with so much care. You can tell you have waited four years for that scene, because there was not one thing wrong with it. You're really quite inspiring, Mary, because you are so in love with this story and it is something I would love to feel about my own. I adore the fact that everything about this is rather simple - you don't douse anything in too much information or description. It is what it is; two lonely souls interacting and seeking comfort. And as ever your dialogue is convincing, and I think is one of the things that really makes your whole piece. These characters are just people - they aren't unrealistic vessels or chess pieces or anything else. They are just like you or me, and you capture their humanity so wonderfully.

So, this chapter was a little racy and a little fun, but at the same time, it was heartwrentching and I know the effects of this are gonna really exist throughout the rest of this fic. Eek, on to the next one!

Laura xxx

Author's Response: Thank you so much. It was difficult to walk the line between showing too much and not giving the moment enough weight. I've been debating when the most realistic time would be for ages -- Lily threw her caution right out the window, but whether she'll regret it remains to be seen. I am glowing from your compliments, thanks again!

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