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Review:tangledconstellations says:
Hey again, Mary!

Finally, a free afternoon to sink into this fic! I have been super excited about this. At this point, the Lily/Sev relationship is actually working really well. In the shadow of James' death I kind of feel as though it's allowed to work. I like to pretend I'm quite a stubborn 'shipper but actually stories like this make me think the contrary :) Severus is so careful with everything he does around Lily, and she does so obviously care for him. It's not as though they are two randoms after all - they do have a past, and that really resonates through in this chapter.

And, oh, the beginning section! Aunt Minnie! Cutest. Ever! It actually feels quite liberating to not have Severus shrouded in like, a constant distrust by everyone. He is still the same though, still introverted and careful and a little mean - like when he was telling off the students! I actually really like that he's not a completely new man - it makes this whole chapter that much more realistic and enjoyable. Sometimes with AU fics you reach a point where you remember that, oh, actually, none of this happens, and you allow yourself to detach from what is going on with the story, but, as with the last story too, no way has that happened so far. Everything is totally...right. I don't know how else to put it. I just wonder WHY this didn't actually happen because it works one hundred million percent. I think the fact that you have so much faith with your story and that you can write and write and write these wonderful chapters shows the confidence you have and so it allows everything to :)

Melora is getting more and more serious, isn't she? Sev's theory is interesting to say the least, but it's kinda scary too. I just want Lily and Harry to be okay, and get out of these awful situations. But, Lily is just too headstrong and lovely to show that she's being worn down by it, too. It is going to be really interesting to see where you are going with this particular story line - as well as your Lily/Sev plotline, too. The two entwined kind of bring it all back down to earth. It's very easy to escape into fluff with their growing relationship but it's even nicer to have something serious for them to react around.

Can't wait for more! :)

Laura xxx

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm sorry it took me a while to respond :) I'm glad you liked my characterization of Severus, it's very hard to resist the temptation to make him too nice. He's still as unpleasant as ever and one of the special things about Lily as that she ignores his poses and / or calls him out.

I wish I had more faith in this story... but it does seem to come in spurts and one morning I will wake up and know exactly where it's going, I just hope this story doesn't take four years to finish like the other one - ha ha!

Thanks so much Laura!

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