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Review:Jchrissy says:
I love the chapter summary. I was giggling my butt off. Okay, to warn you, I will be trying to avoid apostrophes as much as possible because they form some weird code when transferred from my pages document to the review tab. So, if I seem to be using no contractions, that is why. It is a huge pain to go through and take away all the apostrophes them replace them with ones once they are in the review box.

SO! Anyway, I love the start of this. I don’t know I feel worse for, the Weasley’s who already felt horrible for not being able to get him a new pet, or Ron for being so excited thinking of what it could be.

I love that you have Ron feeling so ashamed, I think it is perfect and I think his entire over reaction followed by his regret is perfect. That is the exact way Ron would act, you know him so well!!

Oh! Oh! I am loving Fred and George so far! Your Weasley clan is so perfect my dear, I do not know how you can write families so well. And the introduction to the turn your fat rat yellow spell! It is the perfect tie in to one of the best parts of the first book. That very first meeting between Ron and Harry.

I love the thought process you have Ron going into school with. It's so completely real that he would want to be noticed, but terrified of being noticed and being rubbish at the same time. He wants to have the attention devoted to him, but only in a good way, of course. So maybe it is better to just blend in until he knows if he has something to stand out about. Little did he know he would be best friends with Harry Potter...

Bill cried all morning, the day he started at Hogwarts. - Oh my gosh. This is perfect. Precious and absolutely perfect!


Wow, you managed to turn what could be a very boring first chapter idea into something amazing. It’s intoxicating! The feelings that go through Ron, the complexity of the entire family dynamic, the reminder of what a real family this is and the glimpse of Ron’s life before Harry and Hermione. It is all amazing. You are so talented, Sarah.

I will continue onto the second as soon as possible, this a beautiful and perfect read!!

Author's Response: Ugh, those apostrophes drive me crazy! I write all of my reviews in Word and then have to go through the whole thing again looking for apostrophes and hyphens so that I can change them!

Thank you m'dear for the lovely review, I'm very happy that you enjoyed this; I'm fairly certain it's not my best writing, but oh well! I tried!

I find writing Fred & George quite difficult, they really had their own brand of mischief and humour and trying to capture that can be tricky. But you seemed to like them, so I hope I got it right!

And yeah, I thought that bit about Bill was sweet. He may be incredibly cool and devilishly handsome, but he was also the first Weasley child to go to Hogwarts and was only 11 years old!

Glad you enjoyed it!
Xoxo

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