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Review:EverDiggory says:
Poor Molly! What little *censored* boys!

Alright, so I am finally, yes, finally here with your review!

Grammar: This was good, and there were only a few minor errors--which is always a good thing!

Flow: This was also good! There wasn't any messy transitions and you smoothed out the seams well!

Imagery: This was pretty good, but perhaps add some details about the party scene? I liked the details about Lucy...I think it really gave me the...Jezebel impression you wanted! Or, at least, I think you wanted.

Characterization; This was really good, actually! I feel like I really know Molly, and I already don't like lucy too much(; I love Louis! He is such a sweetheart! Even the characters that weren't around too long, like George, you gave me a really good impression of, and thats just brilliant! I am really hoping to see more of Louis, even if Molly can't ever be with him. I can still fangirl over him;D I want to see more interactions between Molly and her piers--if there is any, she may prefer solitude, but who knows? I think you really picked an under-loved character and I'm excited to see you give her a story!

Plot: I think it is interesting, and I'm not sure how you're going to approach it yet. I'm excited though! It
seems as though you can make it a funny, interesting journey to who she really is, or a dramatic, yet wonderful journey. I am excited to read, because I very ell could be wrong! It has happened before! I really, really want to know more because right now I simply don't know enough to even guess what the outcomes could be!
(sorry for the space here, the review thing is messing up)

It seems like it could be cliche, but I think you are approaching it in a tasteful way which is making it rather unique in its own way.

Reader Interest: I have twenty two million bajillion thousand (like my number?) questions. Theres so much I want to know about everyone. I'm really wondering where you're going to take this and if there will be a romantic interest brought into play for the lovably awkward Molly!

I think theres a lot of potential to this, and I'm excited to see how you shape your story and characters! Happy writing hun!

xx

Ever

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for your help, Ever! This is so awesome, and I am so thankful for you, girl! :) Thanks for the advice and the motivation :)

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