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Review:Lily says:
"The lights are my favorite; they cast the expanse of the hall in a glow of hazy blue and purple hues like a fog from a dream sequence..."
Favourite line.
I like how you described the utter perfection of the evening in one simple line and juxtaposed it with the sinister undertones of the shadows, like Bella's nightmare and her conflicting emotions at the dance, regarding Scorpius and Rose, and also, Albus. I thought how Bella paralleled herself as a shadow and an intruder was intriguing. She's so insecure and you portray that feeling really well, like when she's wondering whether Albus trusts her or not and she answers her unspoken question herself. If I were Albus, I would trust Bella the most, but her secrecy is suspicious...
I almost wish he would find out soon about the project so that he can protect Bella...well, that's how I hope he would react!
Anyway. Another beautifully, well-written chapter with respect shown to your ability to clearly write an original character with realistic emotions. Looking forward to your next chapter!

Author's Response: aw i'm glad you liked this, especially that line - that just so happens to be one of my favorites as well, good choice ;) haha, but that's so sweet!

and i did try to throw in a bit of the shadows, because the whole thing is about to be revealed really soon, like in a couple of chapters, so i wanted to speed it up and make the whole presence more prominent.

you're so sweet; i'll definitely update as soon as the queue reopens! x


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