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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Is it terrible that, when Vladimir first appeared in this scene, I expected him to be holding a white cat whose head he was idly scratching? Maybe it was the sinister grin that brought this image to mind - that, coupled with your vivid descriptions of the Russian Ministry, made me think of a cross between "Doctor Zhivago" and Connery-era James Bond. I admire the amount of detail you put into those descriptions - the little things like the obscure poem for a password, the knights and their lances, the entrance in the clock tower, all of that was perfect for the Potterverse. Familiar in the similarities to the British magical world, but also very unique, not to mention very Russian in feel. Excellent work with that part of the chapter!

Not to say that the rest of the chapter wasn't as good - far from that. Although it's all about building to a climatic point - the rescue which, like Moody, I fear will be a trap - the skillful twists that leave the reader hanging at every turn. Once again, I have to compliment your plotting. There doesn't always need to be bristling action to create tension, and this story proves that - it's an excellent spy thriller.

Yet, at the same time, it is the characters that drive the story. Each of them is solidly characterized (Duncan shows well in this chapter - he didn't need to say very much for me to get a better grasp of his personality - his actions said far more. He seems like one of those subtle people, quiet until the need comes for him to lead the battle), and their strong personalities make them seem in control of the action, choosing their own fates, whatever the cost.

You've made another fantastic addition to this story, and once again, I'm eager to find out what happens next! Happy writing!

Author's Response: That's actually pretty much the same image I had in my head as well, but I thought adding the cat in would just be overkill. I was trying to take some things we see in the HP world and adapt them for Russian culture, and it's great to hear that that seems to be working.

I do think Duncan is starting to come along a bit in this chapter, and he's really come a long way from the 18 year old prankster he was in my other story. The next chapter has been taking me a while, but it's almost done and should have som major developments.

Thank you so much for taking the tim to reviw all these chapters, it's been vry helpful and much appreciated.

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