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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hey Emily! I'm back with another review!

Another awesome chapter! I love the way the plot is developing so far. You've got a great command of the flow; I never feel rushed or like the story is dragging. This chapter is a great burst of intensity after a couple of calmer ones, and that balance is one of the things that makes this story so fun to read.

I'm still loving your characterization, but the character that stands out to me most is Theo. I think you did a great job with him here! The part where he shielded Hermione from looking at the blood seemed so him; a very protective, sweet move. He did seem a little "touchy" though, which I would find creepy if it was anyone but Theo: he seems so sincere that I just saw it as comforting when he would squeeze Hermione's thigh or shoulder. And I literally squealed a little when Hermione started to realize she liked him! It was so precious, and yet I liked the fact that she discouraged her feelings: Hermione would want to be a professional Head Girl, and I think you reflected that well.

In this chapter my impression of Draco really started to change. Up till now he didn't seem that intimidating to me (even if he was trying to be :P), but here he really did seem frightening. Like Hermione, I thought he was all talk, but this chapter shows that there really is a reason to keep an eye on him. It's an awesome development for him, and I loved it!

Your description is still really good as always. Little things stand out to me, like Harry "tearing a roll apart in his hands." That's a great way to show he's angry without actually saying, "Harry was angry." You've clearly got an awesome talent for that, and it's so fun to read :)

I can't find anything I would change about this! It's a great addition to the story, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it :) Feel free to re-request as always!

--Mags

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing again! I'm so happy that you liked this chapter and that you're liking the story so far. I love the developing relationship between Hermione and Theo, and I'm glad that you're seeing it. Eventually, Draco's actions will all make more sense. He's a bit of a mystery still at this point. Thank you again for your kind thoughts! I loved reading this. It made my day. :]

--Emily


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