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Review:Jchrissy says:
First, your descriptions are wonderful. You have great word choices that absolutely bring it to life. I think you are able to really take this many different places.

I love that we are getting the story behind the tragic ghosts, I have never read a founders era, so I'm really excited!

I think the characters you are inventing are great, we really don't know a ton about these so it's more up to you to give them young personalities as opposed to staying canon. A challenge! I love the image you are creating of Helena too. You get us hooked with her despising and loving Hogwarts, its such a contradiction.

I wasn't confused by the changing, I did get a little bit overrun with characters, but I'm sure you'll smooth them out and help remind us who is who and such.

There were some small grammar things, just read through and you'll spot them! Editing is the words, for some reason that black type on white background just begs my eyes to close and fall asleep..

anyway, I think this is a wonderful start!

Author's Response: Awww thanks Jami. I'm so glad you weren't confused. Yes this chapter needs a bit of editing but guess what! I have a beta now. So the future chapters would be grammatically flawless :D

I wanted to create them from the beginning you know, and I didn't want to portray them as the scary Baron and conceited Helena. They'll grow into it but not yet. I want to sort of take them there, you know what I mean?

Thanks again for the review Jami it's a real boost :D

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