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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there!

I am here with your review!

I really enjoyed this first chapter!! I love the way you built up the characters. The characterization comes out clear. I really like the way that you portray Molly and Lucy. They remind me of a female version of Fred and George. =) I also really liked Roxanne. She seems like she has a lot on her plate caused by this boy. I don't know what to make of him yet, other than he reminds me of a younger version of James Potter with the way he talked about the spell he used. I am sure I will see them all in different ways as the story progresses.

The overall flow of the story is great. I didn't see any sentences that felt weird and when you transitioned your character POV and dialogue it was really smooth. I also liked the pace. It was short as you said, but I think it was well thoughtout and really made me want to read more.

The description you use is more subtle, but still creates that picture in my mind as I read through. I don't see any grammar errors either!

I really like the plot of this story. It isn't super strong and in my face, but you set it up nicely and really give it that slow build that brings on a really great story. I am going to be adding this to my favorites and I hope you will re-request when chapter two is ready!!

Until then, keep up the awesome writing!!! =)

-SR17

Author's Response: Hi :) and thank you for reviewing!

I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter as it was pretty short and I usually write 2500-3000 words per chapter so to me I was kinda disappointed in the lack of writing in this one, but I'm glad people thought it was still good enough as a prologue though :)

Aw that's so sweet. That would be amazing to meet the female version of the twins haha and viola we may have one here :p

Yeah Roxanne and Bentley has some history, more from her side than his to be honest. As the story progresses I shall explain more on their relationship and how it came to be the way it has. But Bentley is very cocky and Roxanne know she should hate him but she can't bring herself to...

I often struggled with writing as I often have a lot of awkward sentences. I mean take Pining for You as an example so I'm glad this one doesn't have that problem, as of yet haha. I'm glad you found it somewhat satisfying even though this chapter was pretty short as like what is said above I usually write more than this.

I suppose I've been using the CC from Pining for You in this story as I tried to add more descriptions that I sometime tends to forget...

Thank you for putting it on your favourite! It means a lot :) and I shall definitely re-request don't you worry :p haha I'm glad you like Curveball so far!

Thanks again!


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