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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
Figured it was a good time to read another chapter of this :)

I adored your characterization of Alastor in the opening scene. Sort of a mix of the drill sergent, teacher and father figure... he knows the cost of the war, but it doesn't mean he likes it. I think it was a beautiful image to see him sitting there whispering quietly that they'd come home.

The scene with Gideon and Fabian and Molly was so touching and sort of exciting in a morbid sort of way... exciting because the order is forming, the resistance to the darkness is forming... but at the same time, as a reader, I know what comes of their joining up. Another cost of war. Gah. This is so moving... I doubt i'm making any sense at all.

This line was my favorite line in the entire chapter: Wars canít be won if there isnít anyone willing to fight them." It's a same sentiment to what was in the first chapter, and the emotion it carries still floors me. gahhh. What a cruel time this generation was born into.

Beautiful, as always!

Author's Response: Oh, hey there, Mel! :)

I really liked writing this chapter. Alastor is an interesting character and I wanted to balance his soldier-mentality with one of a man who was doing his job, but also wanted to see his recruits coming home to their families.

I love Gideon, Fabian, and Molly. I kind of want to read more about Gideon and Fabian and their involvement in the war. Aw, yeah, it's so sad knowing everything we do as readers and reading stories prior to everything just falling apart. Molly's a tough cookie, though.

I love that line too! Sometimes when I'm writing...I don't even know where these things pop into my head but they sound good. :P But I feel like the sentiment holds true no matter what. If you don't have people believing in their cause (both sides), there is no war, you know?

Thanks, Mel! You're always so kind to me in your reviews. :)


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