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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
Oh, Mel, this is so, so pretty. That whole first paragraph - oh my god, there are no words to describe how beautiful it is, the way you've described Dearborn. The Slytherin who runs around with the revolutionaries (and what a beautiful word to describe them, I love it). The idea of him suckling from the breast of the heavens - just that whole pedestal they seem to put him on, and Rosmerta's casual observation about how normal he is - how he drinks the same ale and eats the same food. It's all kinds of perfect. I especially love that bit you had showed me before you posted - the entire description of the ale.

All the ways you've opened up Rosmerta to us too was wonderful. It's interesting to see how no one seems to care she's there unless she's need, but Dearborn, he notices her and he's all like, "Anyone would be lucky to talk to you." *swoons*

Your descriptions here are phenomenal. So well-written and I'm going to be so repetitive and telling you how beautiful it is, but I honestly can't get over it. You need to write more like this, I think.

Their introduction was sweet, with a hint of promise. I can't wait to read more. So, so good. I love it and I'm sorry I didn't review this sooner.

Author's Response: Missy!

I know you love your poetry, so I was very anxious to hear your thoughts on this first chapter. I definitely tried to adopt a specific style with this piece with the second person and the present tense and all, and so it's wonderful to hear that it worked out!! I'm glad you think that I managed to portray Rosmerta's character here too! I worried that I had placed too much focus on Dearborn and left her to the wayside... but then again... that is sort of how she is. I don't think she notices herself, if that makes sense.

Anyway, thank you so, so much for reading this and for taking the time to leave this lovely review!! I really appreciate it.

xoxo


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