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Review:dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:
I was mesmerized by the way the torchlight made his hair shine like black fire.

The entire chapter mesmerized me. The way you explain the making of the potion was brilliant. How do you come up with these things? I honestly can't remember in any of side books the Rowling wrote, if she discusses Wolfsbane in greater detail than that it's what Severus gives Remus to drink and they think he's trying to poison him.

I honestly always thought Potions was a bit boring. It was more Snape and Slughorn that I found to be interesting and not the actual lessons but you really managed to keep my attention! I like the small things you add in, they're what makes it really good in my opinion. I donít care about the overall end product but I like to know that they need three different types of water. That if they inhale the potion or it gets in their eyes they could go blind. It makes what they're doing dangerous and I know that it's going to come out fine in the end but there's that nervous tinkling inside of me. That feeling of, 'What if something goes wrong?' That makes me sit at the edge of my seat, biting my nails because I worry that you're going to throw a curveball at me.

You always manage to keep me guessing.

Author's Response: Yes, black fire because MY SEVERUS SHOWERS, THANK YOU VERY MUCH. Ahem. Sorry. Needed to make that clear ;) I have no problem with canon Severus letting himself go since his life pretty much ended when he was 22 or so with Lily's murder, but you can be darn skippy straight my Severus started spiffing up a bit, maybe unintentionally, once Avrille appeared on the scene.

I had a kind of love/hate relationship with Potions reading the books. I mean, a lot of them just seem stupid. Like a Hair-Raising Potion? What the heck is that supposed to be used for? And I half liked the random weird ingredients like newt eyes because it reminds me of Macbeth, but then a lot of it seems to just be gross for no real purpose than to be gross. So for mine, I wanted to find a way that would make the Wolfsbane Potion seem very complicated, since Lupin himself said not many people could make it, but also have it make sense. Most of the herbs I used are actually just the folk names of common things like St. John's Wort to make them more "magical" sounding. I fortunately happened to have a Wiccan book of magical herbs that I referenced and picked out ones that supposed to have effects like clearing the mind or protection from wild animals. Random interesting fact you probably don't know: asphodel is just the folk name for daffodil. Avrille's birthday is April 4th (because of the obvious French connection, Avril, and it's the fourth month of the year) and that's when daffodils start popping up. I picked out her last name before I knew any of that (actually before I even named her Avrille...now I think about it), so it was one of those weird instances where the fan fiction gods steered me in a very weird, coincidental direction.

Oh don't worry, there's a curve-ball on your way. You really think Severus could do something like brew a potion correctly with Avrille staring at him the whole time? ;) Thanks for your wonderful, amazing, detailed, thought-provoking reviews! Sounds like my toddler settled himself back to sleep, so I'm going to keep reading them! ~Renny


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