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Review:CambAngst says:
Guess who's back? I've been yearning for some new Pansy!

This chapter had a really bittersweet feel to it. Parts of it were very upbeat and gave me the feeling that Pansy's life is progressing. Other parts were very sad. Your pace continues to be very deliberate and consistent, moving through the gradual progression of Pansy's life.

I really liked the way you described her feelings of doubt and especially the little meditation on her father and the Dark Lord that accompanied them. Her little magical mishaps were also entertaining. It was funny to imagine her trying to keep a stiff upper lip when she saw her purple hair in the mirror. Actually, a dark purple wouldn't be such a bad look on Pansy as she was portrayed in DH Part 2.

I thought your author character made a very good point about the suppression of the Dark Arts, although it seems to have been rather lost on Pansy. Driving something into the shadows doesn't make it go away. It often becomes more dangerous. I did find it a little odd for Pansy to associate the Dark Arts with her lifestyle, since she doesn't seem to know any dark spells, but perhaps this was by virtue of her father's connection to Voldemort.

The conversation with her mother was really sad. The poor, old dear is finally beginning to notice the realities that Pansy has been carefully shielding her from. The argument about salmon obviously had nothing to do with salmon. The fact that she seemed unable to use the past tense when referring to Pansy's father was also striking and emblematic of how disconnected she has become. I have a feeling that she won't last much longer.

I noticed one little typo as I read, so bravo on terrific writing!

-- "With a sign, Pansy left the table, leaving the troublesome newspaper behind." - With a sigh

The main constructive criticism I can offer is that the pace of the story seems pretty slow at times. It has an almost Victorian feel to it, focusing on Pansy's gradual progress through her difficult situation. I find myself wishing for more plot development alongside your extensive and very lovely character development. But overall, I'm still enjoying the story. Your writing is fantastic and you paint such vivid pictures for me.

Author's Response: It's so lovely to see you back again! I always love reading your reviews- they're so thoughtful!

I'm glad that you liked Pansy's magical exploits. It's definitely interesting writing them since from the books we get the impression that she wasn't very talented or smart and it's sometimes difficult to think of appropriate magical mishaps that could happen. Not everyone can blow up a cup while trying to turn water into rum like Seamus Finnigan. :)

I'm glad that you liked the author's article on the Dark Arts. You know, I didn't even think about Pansy not knowing any dark spells- I'd associated her with the Dark Arts due to her father and his connection to Voldemort, just like you suggested.

Yes, her mother isn't doing so well. She can't accept that her husband is gone, essentially for life. It's frustrating for Pansy, who is trying to move on and make something of her family and her life.

Thanks for pointing out the typo- I'll just go and fix it! As for the plot development, I can definitely see what you mean. As I may have mentioned in my last response, I didn't want to go too quickly through her studying for NEWTs so as to make it more realistic (7 months is a long time to jump over) and took it as an opportunity to develop her character and introduce several other elements. However, within at max two chapters, the NEWTs will have happened and the speed will pick up once again. I can promise you that things (or as many things that can happen in a character-driven story) will happen soon.

Thanks once again for reading and reviewing!


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