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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
Baww. I don't know why this chapter has so few reviews! It really was an enjoyable read. I do read many Hogwarts-pregnancy fics (or just out of Hogwarts-precnancy fics, for that matter) so I can't really comment on originality or cliches or anything like that, but I thought it was a lovely first chapter. I really enjoyed the strong friendship between Lucy, Molly and Roxanne. Friendships in fics is one of my favorite things to read, afterall... where would the HP books be without strong friendships?? My only critique would be to be cautious about the atmosphere of your narration. When we're inside Roxanne's head, the language you use is lofty and elegant, but when she starts talking, her speaking voice is poppy and fresh. I know you're trying to convey very strong emotions (afterall, she did just find out she's pregnant), but a little more continuity between the feel of the prose may help this read a bit better.

That being said, don't worry about it too much!! I think that you've made a really nice start to this story!! Well done. :)

xoxo
Melissa

Author's Response: Thank you for your review :) Yeah Curvenball is feeling a little bit under loved than my other story. I wish people would give it a chance but I think some people don't because they genuinly don't like pregnancy stories and so on as like you said they tend to be a little cliche.

I'm glad you like the bond between the three girls as I wanted to create a strong bond between them in some sort of sisterhood and whatnot.

Yeah thanks for pointing that out I'll bear that in mind as I write chapter two, since I've already got chapter one written out. I might try and out that in the queue before it closes for a week though.

Thank you :D


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