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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello again!

Grammar/Spelling: Okay, I think you should definitely get this chapter checked out by a beta. The biggest error I noticed was a tendency for you to use the word "and" instead of "had." There were other things too, though. :/

Characterization: Okay! So, I like Hermione in this chapter, though I think she actually would have been one of the people who was more open to the new dormitory arrangements. I always imagined Hermione as less-prejudiced than Harry and Ron when it came to Slytherins. Maybe that's just an opinion. ;]

Descriptions: You know my detail-rant by now. If you amp them up, this can really become realistic for the readers!

Emotions: Hmm...I think I might have liked to see more embarassment from Hermione when Draco was mocking her, and then maybe a more serious response to the new dormitory idea. She seemed a little annoyed, but I couldn't really tell how she felt about it all.

Plot: Well! Things are definitely moving along. I've never read a story with this particular dormitory-change. That's interesting! I really can't wait to see what happens next. Things are bound to get very complicated very fast. I thought it was interesting that the portrait outside their dorm is Snape. That was a fun detail. The conversation he had with Harry was a little odd, though...

Interactions: Well, I like the friendship you show between Harry, Ginny, and Hermione. I like how they all back each other up. I'm interested to see if the Slytherins will get any better in later chapters...

So far, so good! I'm interested to see what happens next. Besides the grammar, you don't have to worry about this chapter. I'll read more soon!


Author's Response: Hey! :)
So I took your advice and my story is getting beta'd as we speak :)

Thank-you so much for the reviews, sorry it took me a while to reply!
I'm definitely taking all of your comments into mind when i do a re-write, but i think i will continue writing a few more chapters before i do this :)

Can't wait to see what you have to say for the rest! :)

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