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Review:academica says:
Hey there! I'm here with your requested review :)

I think this is a very original piece. I like how it almost takes an observer's view, in that it's told from the perspective of someone who can see wide expanses of time and space and not merely the events of one battle or even one war. I also like how you've turned the tables on the series and told this story from the side of Voldemort and the purebloods who were loyal to him.

I don't think the wording here is confusing, but the overall structure of the story did throw me a little bit. I had to re-read it several times before I felt like I really understood what was going on, given how vaguely you've written the events and characters. The vagueness is neat, especially with the forboding ending, but it was definitely a little tough to wrap my head around with just one read.

I think the flow here is okay - I felt sort of hooked in to the story as the grandfather told it, and I was as excited as the boy to see it come to an end. I also didn't spot any major technical errors here. Additionally, I really liked the imagery here, especially the lines at the very beginning. Overall, I think this is a nice piece, albeit a little abstract.

Nice job! I hope this review is helpful :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Thanks for getting around to this review so quickly! I'm glad that you liked this piece- I definitely agree with you that it is "original" because I've never written anything exactly like it. However, I really enjoyed writing it because it is essentially a fairy-tale- one of my favourite genres to read.

I'm glad that you don't think that the wording is confusing. I see what you mean about the story's vagueness and I'm glad that you don't find it off-putting. When I was writing it I didn't put in too many specific details because I didn't want to cement it too solidly in reality, if that makes sense.

As well, I'm glad that you liked the imagery. Unfortunately, I can't lay claim to the first sentence, as you would have read in the Author's note, which I would say is the highlight of the story.

Thank you once again for this review- I definitely found it helpful as it put to rest some of my concerns about the story!


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