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Review:tangledconstellations says:
Ahh! Another awesome chapter! I know you said this was a bit of a filler, but I honestly didn't feel like it was. Maybe mentally it felt like a filler, but remember, we don't know what's coming up :)

In a way it was nice not to have Sirius and the marauders in this chapter, because again it reminds you of the impact Cygnus has on the whole of the novel. After all, he is the king, and not a young prince. It puts into context the amount of power that he has, to have such a weighty chapter too. I think I secretly like Cygnus. He's a strong character, and villain's are always a little bit likeable.

Regulus totally broke my heart in this chapter too, and the fact that there is this potential for this to become a bildungsroman story, one central to Regulus' coming of age, as well as holding all the strings of Cygnus' evilness and the marauders poorness, is just going to make further developments fantastic. There's so much that you could build on and make better, to finish with an elaborate 'and they lived happily ever after' or even 'and then they all died' haha! I am very, very excited to see where this goes!

The coronation and funeral was, to me, very convincing, so I wouldn't worry about that. You have a wonderful way of really adapting the mood and style of your writing depending on its purpose. I think if I was to write a coronation scene I'd continue on with my useless drawl, but you just have a such a really inspiring way of picking up what you've got, shaking the dust off and making something really magnificent of it. The regal atmosphere was amazing, and at the end...foreshadowing! evil! excitement!

If you do have the inspiration to continue this, please, please do, because I would love to read more of it. You've fleshed it out a lot already from the readers point of view so hopefully it will be easier for you to continue where you left off if you wish to. Thank you for writing this, it's been super enjoyable so far!

Laura xxx

Author's Response: I guess a lot of people didn't feel like it was a filler and the more I read it, the less I think so too. The next few chapters are probably going to be more fillers.

I do have to give you guys a break from maraudering outlawed youths. ;) But yes, I do like going back and forth between Cygnus and Sirius to show how everything revolves around the actions of those main characters. Haha, it's not secret that I like Cygnus, so I'm glad I'm not the only one.

I know, poor Reg. I just want to give him a great big hug. This will be a coming of age story not only for Reg but Sirius too so it should definitely be interesting to see the paths they take. I can't tell you if everyone lives happily ever after or if everyone dies, maybe a little of both! Who knows? :)

Ah, thanks. I was a little nervous about those scenes (obviously) but it seems to work well for everyone who's read it so far, so that makes me happy. Yes, evil! Foreshadowing. Ooh, what will happen next? ;)

I am really trying hard to continue. I have about a thousand words of the next chapter written but have only written maybe ten more words in the last three weeks. I'm hoping by finally responding to these reviews, I'll get the motivation and encouragement to update soon.

Thank YOU for your lovely reviews. You're superb.


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