This was probably the cutest chapter ever. After the dramatic and fast-paced previous chapters, this one was so lovely and so effective. The marauders make me think of the Lost Boys, which I guess in a way they are. They make me think that within canon it really was them against the world at Hogwarts. So much bromance! This was so lovely and so heartwarming, especially to see that Sirius is starting to be accepted, and that they've all got soft hearts, despite their hardened exterior.
It's also really interesting that you've included Dumbledore in this fic - he has the potential to solve everything, I can just feel it! The range of characters you've included is pretty astounding, and you've kept them all canon and convincing, just form the roles they play, such as Moody's, and Kingsley's. It's so interesting and really quite fun to see the parallels you've drawn :)
Dialogue was something I forgot to mention in the last review, but I may as well mention it again here, because your convincing use is just so simply brilliant, haha! Often when I write I worry that it's all a bit jarry and I go a bit overboard on it, and so I tend to look out for that in other people's writing, but yours is so easily paced, so realistic and thus so, so effective. Paired with your simplistic descriptions, which as I said before work totally well, you create such a good atmosphere with your words. This fic is seriously enjoyable, because it's not too serious and strained, nor does it take too much effort to read, if that makes sense? It's just the perfect story - you're not trying to prove anything; you're entertaining us perfectly, as well as making some glorious comparisons to the canon. :)
Author's Response: Bawww, the Marauders. I love them dearly and they are a lot of fun to write. To be honest, they were a bit inspired by The Lost Boys so there's that. I am going to enjoy writing the bromance! It's going to be epic.
Yeah, they've had a rough life but they'll warm up to him soon enough. They need to work on trusting each other.
Ooh, Dumbledore. Yes, he will play a very large role in this, have no fear. :) I'm so pleased you like my cast of characters. It's really fun bringing in all these canon characters and fitting them into roles that I can perfectly imagine.
Oh, yay, I'm pleased my dialogue works for you. It's hard for me to find a balance sometimes, and I worry that I'm making the kids sound too mature. =/
Thanks so much. You're beyond sweet. :)