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Review:tangledconstellations says:
Eep! Hey lovely! Reading this chapter again has reminded me what an awesome fic you have here! You must definitely continue with it!

I felt as though I'd slipped into a dark fairytale while reading this. You've given me everything I needed to fill my mind with the images required in this chapter, but not once did I have to decipher a poetic description. I think my only wish is that this chapter was longer, because I could keep reading on and on and on! Your narrative is just awesome and so effective; it's simple but it's dark. Everything is so perfectly timed. One thing I have seen often as advice to do when rereading your own chapters is to imagine them as a movie, and I think you MUST have done this because I was pretty much imagining it as one! Something about the way you write tells me about the light, the faces they pull, the atmosphere of each room. I could practically hear music in the ballroom! It's just so awesome to be swept away like that.

I think it's fairly unique to take a step back in a fic and address something that's come before what you've already covered. Dramatic irony alert! It just makes us doubly sympathise with Regulus, which equally so is extra good, because you're impressing that age gap, the childish vulnerability of Reg on us all over again. To be honest though I was so caught up in this chapter I completely forgot that Sirius is (relatively) safe - and I guess that just shows that your writing had me completely convinced! The tension and cliffhanger at the end though - simply epic. I apologise for the lack of coherence in this review, by the way. I feel as though that last line should be followed with DUH DUH DUH!

You've continued to set up and establish key players in this fic which is always super, and I think the way you alternate the viewpoints will always be effective as it shows us the gravity of this whole story and how many people it's encompassing. I honestly can't wait for more! :D

Laura xxx

Author's Response: Hi, thank you! I'm glad you think so. This is my baby so I'm really hoping to get a new chapter up soon.

This was a bit different, stylistic, for me. I think for a few authors I know, their one-shots and novels are different - novels a bit less poetic or flowery. My chapters are long enough, but it makes me so happy that you just want to keep reading and I am so happy that you can imagine the scenes. I think it helps that everything's written out in acts and really gives it that feel of a play/movie.

Aw, yeah, poor Reg. He's going to have a bit of a sad life for the next few years.

Ha! If only fics had music in the background. ;)

Yay, I'm glad everything works well for you. Thank you for your review. I'm hoping this will spark my muse to get chapter 6 written!


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