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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! It's me again.

Grammar/Spelling: All right...again about betas. :] There are a LOT of grammar errors (especially with misplaced apostrophes and commas). There were also a few issues with capitalization and word usage. So, getting somebody to beta read this will probably really help. :]

Characterization: Okay. We've got Harry, Hermione, and Ginny in this chapter. I'm not too sure about any of their characterizations. I think Harry would have been more annoyed at Ron, and sided with Hermione when she was angry. I think Ginny also would have been really impatient with his decision. I got that Hermione was upset, but the other two just seemed complacent. It was a little confusing.

Descriptions: You read my detail-rant in my last review, but the same thing applies for this chapter. I didn't see too many details about how things looked, sounded, felt, etc. Those would really help if you added them in.

Emotions: Again, I think all three of the characters in this chapter would have been angrier with Ron. I think Hermione would have been really hurt too, but I didn't see that portrayed. Ginny and Harry were a little disgruntled, but I think they would have been more angry, especially because Ron's actions hurt Hermione.

Plot: Okay! Well, plotwise, this was a good chapter. It really moved the plot along. I'm interested as to why Hermione wouldn't just tell her friends that Draco saved her life. Maybe it would even make them more open to him. I know he insulted her and was mean, but he DID save her life, all the same. One plot point that was a tad odd--Ginny calls Hermione, "H," at one point. It was a bizarre nickname to attach to the character. My opinion, though, don't worry too much about it. :]

Interactions: Well! I liked that Harry and Ginny were so supportive of Hermione when she found out that Ron hadn't come to Hogwarts. I felt really bad for her, but I was glad that her friends were there for her.

Good job setting up the plot for the next chapters. I think you're doing well with the storyline. The grammar is my biggest concern for this story so far. Other than that, keep up the good work! I'll read more soon.

--Emily

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