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Review:caoty says:
Hi, I managed to tag you back! :D

One of the things that hit me most about this chapter was how, at the beginning, you've managed to work the imagery of death into nearly everything. Not only is Fred dead, but so are George's eyes (and so is the way he acts: your brief mentions of his isolation and passivity are all we need), so are their acheivements together. It's not depressing as such, but it does leave us feeling empty, as if, like George, we are nearly the living dead.

It's also very fitting that the shop, the bringer of happiness and excitement to so many people, is the place where George's emotions are once again awakened and this spell of feeling dead is broken. I don't know whether that was intentional or not, but it definitely worked.

At first, I was a little surprised at Hannah's appearance - what are the chances? - but then I realised I can see her as a very healing person, emotionally (do you know what I mean? Very caring and empathetic; perfect for fixing George.) I'd have never thought of that myself, but it makes perfect sense - the sign that you are a very good writer, in my opinion.

I hope you continue this someday, as I do quite like George, and I'd want to see him heal.

Author's Response: Hi there!

Wow, that was a really great response to it! You're right, I seem to have worked the idea of death into every nook and cranny here. The living dead? I like it. *ponders thoughtfully*

Yes, that's definitely the message I was trying to get across. The place where he and his brother had essentially 'raised' would have definitely been a sore point for him, in my opinion. I'm glad you thought this came across.

I chose Hannah for that exact reason - I imagine her having a very soothing presence, somewhat matronly I suppose, even though she'd had her own heartbreak.

Thank you for your lovely compliments and review!

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