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Review:tangledconstellations says:
Ahh I love a cliffhanger! ;)

So far I am mesmerised by the way you alternate between characters. It's really effective, and heightens this sense that everyone is intertwined within the course of this story. Dorcas' nightmare made me really feel for her but from her narrative I get the impression she is being so remarkably brave. You captured the creepy horrors of Azkaban really well. I remember reading the Chamber of Secrets and not fully understanding why Hagrid feared it so much. But this really reminded me what a spooky, isolating place JK intended for it to be.

Bellatrix really interested me in this chapter too. She has such an evil, frightening exterior but you've suggested and wonderfully so that there's a part inside her that's actually human. Her squeezin Draco's shoulder a little too hard was a really effective image. I doubt very much she has much of a maternal instinct, but that doesn't mean not one at all.

Love this, Mary, and I can't wait to read more!

Laura xxx

Author's Response: Thank you! This chapter was very hard to write but luckily I had Dorcas's dream in one piece to work from. (lucky me, I had that dream myself several months ago! sometimes being a writer is a great way to get rid of these things!) Azkaban is the dark side of the wizarding establishment, the flip side of the chocolate frogs and pet owls. And it's a dark side which has always been there -- independent of any one evil character.

It'll be interesting to see how Bellatrix copes with surrogate parenthood while trying to plot revenge. She's so self-centered, but the two people who can pull her out of her own interests are Narcissa and Voldemort. (and Draco, by extension of Narcissa) I can't say more and spoiler-ify my own review response!

Thanks so much for your reviews, I am beginning to break through the problem with Chapter 6 and hopefully will finish it soon :)

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