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Review:Erised says:
Hi! Tagging you from the common room :)

This is a very short but intriguing story, answering questions but at the same time creating more. You have a very interesting style of writing - it's very intense and is completely refreshing to read. The first half I thought really captured the scattiness of Tonks' mind, and the second half, whilst a little confusing at first, then displayed a really heartbreaking look into Remus' previous relationship with Sirius. It was great.

I also thought you captured the dissatisfaction that seems to be omnipresent in their lives very well too - just the little things, like the tea being "lukewarm". The little details, whether intentional or not, really elevated the story.

This was a great read, and I'd love to see some more of your work :)

Author's Response: Hi!

Intensity seems to be a thing with me. In fact, in English class yesterday, we had to write about Humpty Dumpty, and I somehow managed to make *that* super intense and dramatic. But anyway. I'm glad (oh God, there's that word) that Tonks' thoughts worked for you - her style of thinking and my style of writing don't really mesh well together, so it was a bit difficult.
The second half with that giant sentence was a bit of experimentation with stream-of-consciousness, and it's the first time I've done something like that, so that might be why it was a bit confusing. I'll just have to work on that in the future, I suppose.

The lukewarm tea - I always saw Tonks as being just really bad at making tea in general. XD
Now that I think about it, it definitely does add to the quiet dissatisfaction both of them have - Remus is taking second best because he can't bring himself to care anymore, and Tonks is never good enough.

Thank you so much for your review, and I'm glad you liked it (oh Lord, I said that word twice). :)


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