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Review:Renfair says:
It's so exciting you get to use this chapter after having written it so long ago. I know exactly how that feels!

"He would gladly give himself up; he was like a starving man grasping for breadcrumbs on the pavement and shoving them greedily into his mouth." --Wow, that's a really great image. Obviously very sad, but powerful.

So that was super hot, but also incredibly tasteful. Thanks so much for that. Not that I expected you to, but I'm so glad it didn't turn into some kind of smut scene. Severus and Lily are both private people, and I'm glad you allowed them their privacy. Just knowing "it" happened is enough :)

I think you did a great job writing Lily's conflicting emotions. She's half on the rebound, needing comfort from anyone she cares about who will give it, but she also half wants Severus just for himself. Oh, and I also REALLY appreciated the stretch marks thing :) Not only was it obviously realistic, but also the way you had Severus think of it as a physical scar of James "possessing" Lily was great.

I'm so relieved Severus is going to stay. Lily's whole single mom to a toddler thing just strikes too close to home. It's definitely great to have an extra set of hands, and those hands being hot and male are a wonderful bonus! Come Severus, time to step up to the Daddy plate. Harry isn't even going to remember James, but he'll remember you!

This was definitely a 10/10 chapter for pure Snily fan service :D

Author's Response: Aw, thanks for your kind words. I am glad Lily's reactions were believable -- I worried about that. I had never thought of stretch marks as belonging to anyone but the mother herself, but I thought Severus (in his usual possessive way) would view them as a mark of James's history with Lily. I think Lily might smack him if he verbalized this.

I didn't want to go into too much detail but to focus on the emotional repercussions of the event in this chapter -- things will never be the same and Lily has a lot to sort through.

So glad you enjoyed it!


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