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Review:Renfair says:
I'm FINALLY back! Sorry it took me so long. You know obviously how busy I've been the past few weeks, but I felt bad not catching up with this story since I only had a few chapters to go.

I always enjoy Severus and Minerva banter. They have a very interesting relationship since she was once his teacher and now they're equals. I would think once in a great while Minerva would struggle with that, like when Severus gets all smug about Slytherin kicking butt in Quidditch and she'd be just dying to dock points from him for being an annoying little git :)

"It would hardly do for the students to see him looking cheerful; they might think they could get away with something." --Oh no no no, that wouldn't do at all. Severus must NEVER look happy around students! It would be like the fifth horsemen of the apocalypse or something.

Hehehe, "Aunt Minnie?" Yes, I can totally picture Severus repeating that message word for word to Lily and the expression that would be on his face.

"When Professor Snape laughed, it was generally an extremely bad sign." --Uh oh, forget the apocalypse. Severus laughing is practically Ragnarok. Better go prepare your Einherjar for battle.

"...even with Potter's cranky, drooling boy-child stuck to her like a thistle." --Hahaha, I can't stop laughing at your descriptions in this chapter, and my husband keeps asking what's so funny. Oh nothing, just my good friend Siri inadvertently describing our own toddler so expertly.

So yeah, this chapter was a little shorter than your others, but you always pack so much into them that I wouldn't have noticed if you hadn't put the note at the beginning pointing it out. The twist of Melora being possessed is interesting and something I didn't think of myself, surprisingly. So maybe instead of getting a small shatter of Voldemort's soul in her like Harry did in canon, she got everything he had left when he was "killed?" That's really creepy.

I loved how Lily just sat there and vented at Severus forever. That's exactly what a mother stuck alone with a toddler and an unstable teenager would do. Too bad she had to drag up James (hint hint, NOT what Severus wants to listen to, Lily!) It's been five months! Get over him already!

Lovely chapter! I'm going to read another since I'm behind, and I have a free evening :)

Author's Response: Hmmm. regarding Melora's possession... I can't say whether you are onto something but I love reading your speculations about the magical mechanics behind the scenes.

I really enjoyed writing Severus and Minerva as peers. I'd love to write one of those Quidditch rivalry scenes sometime :D That would be fun! Imagining her having to teach Severus to play when he became Head of House is hysterical.

I laughed writing Lily's vent and Severus's reaction (which was to keep eating). I want their relationship to be less idealized and more realistic as the sequel goes along, for better and for worse.

Thanks again Renny!

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