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Review:Moonyxluna says:
Hi! Here with your requested review :)

I honestly loved everything about this. I usually review as I read but with the way things were formatted (which, my praise for will come below :p ) I wanted to read everything all at once and give you my overall opinion.

I thought the formatting of this story was so neat; what you did with mixing up the parts of the story -- it flowed incredibly well being interchanged and I think it made this such a special and unique one-shot.

I love how Dean talks about Luna. Every time it was so heartwarming when he explained how much he loved her. My favorite parts were where he wasn't surprised by the way she worked; he just went on to tell how he embraced and loved the things about her. It was also neat to see you dig into some of the emotions she would have had about her Father's actions during the war. I never even thought about what the public would think of Xenophilius' temporary betrayal of Harry -- for Luna or not -- and the consequences of his actions. You wrote her being upset so well. I have a huge soft spot in my heart for Luna and she's normally portrayed as the weird, out there personality that Dean even thought at one point.

I know this was already 5000 words which is massively impressive in itself, but the one thing I would have liked to see brought up was a memory of the pair of them in the dungeon at Malfoy Manor. My own ideas of the Dean/Luna have always started there, and I did notice you mentioned the aftereffects, but maybe a little bit about what it was like seeing her stay strong for Ollivander or something. Honestly though, that was the only thing I sort of 'missed' reading this; I thought it was so well put together.

I loved the paint scene! It was SO adorable! Especially how well Luna took the 'no orange'. It was just as I said above, the way you write Dean, he just knows Luna, and they have such a great understanding for eachother, making this ship just work so naturally.

It was heart wrenching to see how Luna's dad fell apart without her. That was such a tough situation for Xenophilius to be in, being forced to pick between his own daughter and the war, and you wrote it with such careful consideration that it made everything so believable.

I honestly have nothing but the highest praise for this, I'm so glad you requested it! It was such an enjoyable read. Good luck in your challenge!

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for the awesome review! I am so flattered that you enjoyed this so much :)

Thanks for your comments on the way Dean and Luna work as a couple. You've mentioned some of the things I worked really hard to get across, like the way he accepts her quirks and doesn't try to change them. I'm so happy you like them together! This isn't a pairing that you see every day, and I wanted to make it realistic but still adorable. And the paint scene is one of my favorites too :)

I see Luna as someone who has really strong principles, and who values the secure relationship she has with her dad. Both of those things combined made it hard for her to accept what Xeno did. I think that would be a tough situation for everyone involved.

I'm glad you liked the way the scenes interchanged. I've seen it done in other stories and liked a lot, and I thought I'd give it a try myself. It's great to know that I pulled it off decently well :)

Hey, what an awesome idea about Malfoy Manor! I think you've inspired a plunny for a new oneshot :D

Thanks again for this wonderful review! You've seriously made my day, and I really appreciate your time and feedback :)

--Maggie


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