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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hey Emily! I'm here with your review, and I really enjoyed this chapter as always :)

I loved seeing more of your OCs in this chapter. Theo and Garrett especially...they're emerging into great characters, and they're hilarious together. I also liked Mandy's little moment with Ron; I can tell they're going to get along :)

I like seeing everyone so open-minded toward each other. I was a little suprised that Harry and Ron were so nice to the Slytherins (knowing how much they hate that house), but I think their loyalty to Hermione helped with that some. I can see them being willing to make some sacrifices for her, like you mentioned during the conversation between the three of them. Also, I like seeing a new kind of Slytherin in Theo and the OCs. It makes total sense; the other three houses have all different types of people in them, so why shouldn't Slytherin be different? It's nice to see a more well-rounded view of that house.

Your dialogue is awesome, one of the strongest points of this chapter. Theo and Garrett, like I said, are so funny, and the girls have some great lines as well. Everyone's dialogue feels natural to me and flows well, and it just feels like a group of teenagers joking around with each other, which is so much fun. Great job with that :)

The only character I'm not sure about at this point is Draco. He's being really wierd, and I'm not sure what he could possibly be up to. Also, he doesn't seem like the type to just go up to Hermione and strike up a conversation. But then again, in this case it makes more sense, because he's clearly planning something to get under her skin. And by the way, I'm excited to see exactly what that plan is :) So it will take some more time for me to decide if I like what you're doing with Draco, but trust me when I say I'm very excited to read on :)

The ending was great! I love the cliffhanger, and it's a great way to draw people in to the next chapter. I love it!

Another great chapter! Please feel free to request whenever, as always :)

--Mags

Author's Response: Hey Maggie!

I'm glad you like the OCs and Theo! Harry and Ron are really giving them a chance for Hermione, you're right. And I love the idea of Slytherins that aren't "all bad." I doubt that everyone in the House is a jerk, so I really played off of that in this story. I'm glad you liked all of their dialogue! Sometimes I feel heavy-handed with it...

I hope Draco will start to make more sense later on. Right now, he's just trying to not blend into the background. He lost a lot of his reputation at the end of their sixth year, and he's feeling like he has to prove himself. So, I hope that shows later on.

Thanks for reviewing! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story!

--Emily


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