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Review:academica says:
Hey! I'm here from the TGS Review Exchange :)

Wow, this is really original! I always appreciate finding a good story that features mental illness (or something like it) as a central theme, and I think you did a good job of illustrating true mental chaos here. Even if Molly's not crazy, though, she's so empowered, and it's very inspiring to see her break up her perfect life and take charge of it all.

At the same time, though, the emotion and vulnerability that Molly feels here is more than evident. I can really sense her anxiety at the beginning, with the perfection closing in around her, and I like how frustrated she gets when she's looking at the picture and seeing how she was happy at a past moment in time. You've really done a good job of adding complexity to a pretty unknown character, and for me, the effect is that Lysander can't even hold a candle to her. She's distraught internally over him, but I see her as being so much more than he could ever be here.

Your imagery is quite striking, and I liked the flow and pacing of the piece as well. I didn't see any technical mistakes either, so that's great. Overall, I think you did a really great job with this one-shot!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Gah! Well thank you so much! I'm so pleased that you liked it!! There are so few stories that feature mental illness well that i actually tend to avoid them. I think it's such a sensitive topic and a complex thing that it's hard to get across. I'm beyond flattered that you felt like i handled it well. :P Not that she's quite crazy here, but i think she's definitely teetering on a narrow line, i can see how if she was pushed more emotionally, she'd crack a little more. Her psychological and emotional state are very fragile, even when she isn't going through change of plans.

I like how you've labeled her as empowered and how she shines in the moment of madness. I always thinks it's sorta cool when someone sees something that i never really thought of or intended for the character explicitly. I don't think that she really saw what she actually was, she sees herself in a box at times and has nothing too great to offer the world. Anyway, much Molly love, i wish there were more stories about her because i harbor much adoration for her! :D

Thank you so so so much for your lovely review Amanda! Gahhh It was so lovely! I really appreciate your ideas and thoughts on this and how you really dissected Molly.

zayne :P


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