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Review:dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:
Hello! Dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap here with your requested review. So you were worried about the characterization of Arthur and Molly. I love Arthur and Molly so I'm very excited to read this. Let's get started!

I tend to do a running review, I hope that's okay with you.

She smiled at her reflection and thought to herself that she didn't scrub up too badly. The robes she was wearing weren't brand new, there hadn't been time for all of that fuss. They were a little moth eaten in places and as Molly played with a particular hole she thought that if there had been time to plan a proper wedding she would have loved a new set.

I think it is very Molly to think to herself that she doesn't 'scrub up too badly.' I thought that was funny. Aw! It’s her wedding day? At first I thought she was getting ready to go on a date so maybe that’s why she didn't have time to get a new set of dress robes. I can imagine her wearing pea green ones with some holes but not really caring too much about it because it's not about the outfit but more about the day.

Molly, I want to marry you. Right away. The world is changing, there are dangerous times ahead and before any of that starts I want you to be my wife.

I'm in love with Arthur. That's just...him. I hear him in my voice saying those words and the look he gives her is just magical. I'm the worse when it comes to review requests, I hope you don't mind my gushing but you have no reason to worry about your characterization about the two. You are really able to define their warm nature without saying too much but not giving us too little.

Molly's heart jumped as she spotted Arthur stood at the other end of room, his back to her.

Stood should be 'standing'

put one foor in front of

foor should be 'foot'

He knew in his heart of hearts that Molly would never have said yes if she wasn't one hundred percent sure, no-one forced Molly Prewett into doing anything she didn't want to do.

Okay. So what I really love about this is how you use Arthur to give us insight who Molly is and Molly to give us insight on who Arthur is because you could have easily had them think about themselves and give us a look into who they think they are but instead their focus is on their significant other and that fits for a wedding based scene.

This was marvelous! You really tugged at my heart strings. I felt so happy while reading this, their emotions effected me and that's all you can really ask for when you write something. I can't wait to read the rest of the collection. Thank you so much for requesting. I'm sorry I wasn't much help since I enjoyed this so much! If you have any questions/concerns please feel free to PM me.

- Deeds

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