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Review:dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:
Hey there! It's Deeds here with your requested review. I'm excited to read a new story of yours so let's get started! So you didn't write anything for 'areas of concern' so I guess you just want a general review? I hope that's okay with you!

Slytherin, of blood so pure rumour says it runs clear through his arteries and veins, who trounces around with the likes of Bones, Vance and the Prewetts.

^ This section really caught my attention. I love the description and the imagery right here of the 'clear' arteries and veins. I also really like the way you end the first paragraph because if I didnít know you were talking about Rosemetra I would still think it's someone who works in a pub/bar or a restaurant of some sort, wiping down the tables and having to begrudgingly listen to patrons talk on and on.

You have hung around the pub long enough to know your role, and flies on the wall should not speak or prance about in fine gowns. Unless there are empty mugs to fill with ale or bruised prides to nurse with a flattering grin, unless there are grumbling stomachs in need of a hot supper or broken hearts in need of empathetic ears, you are no one to them.

I really just want to copy and paste everything and tell you how much I adore each part but I have to pick and choose or else I won't have enough room at the end. This description you have going on in this story is really something else. I like how you paint the picture for us, it kind of shifts here and there into this dream-like world of hers and then back to reality again but itís very subtle.

I think you also put us into the mentality of what it is like to be a barmaid. You have the whole fly on the wall aspect, someone that really doesnít matter to them down. It's actually quite sad because it's the truth. I think it's like that when you go anywhere where they serve you. The server says their name, asks you if you need anything or what and you just forget the name, forget the face, don't really care because the person who is serving you changes each time and even if they don't change they are just there.

No one wants to talk to him. Anyone would be lucky to talk to you.

I enjoyed their conversation though it was very fleeting and not much. I feel like you showed us who the characters were in that small interaction. I think you have a great beginning to a very interesting story.

The pairing is one I have never read before and I love it when I come across pairings or characters I would have never gave a second thought too. I also think stylistically this might be different for you but you're doing a fantastic job so far.

Thanks so much for requesting! If you have any questions/concerns feel free to PM me.

- Deeds/Alyssa

Author's Response: Hey!

I always love reading your reviews. They are always so helpful and encouraging!

Oooh! I do like that passage you picked out from the first paragraph. I think you may be the first person who has commented on it. We don't know much about Caradoc in canon, so it was sort of fun to craft his character here. I reckon that Sirius cannot be the first person from pureblood lines who was opposed to You-Know-Who's reign, and it was interesting for me to have someone from slytherin house.

Ah! I'm glad you were able to get into Rosmerta's shoes or head or whatever. I have worked in the food industry and so I was able to draw some of her views from my personal experience.

The parallels that I made between Caradoc being anyone and Rosmerta being no one are inspired by the notation within ee cummings' poem that this was inspired by. If you've never read it, you really should. Tis brilliant!!

Anyway, thank you so, so much!

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