Hey Maggie! This is DarkRose (Emily) from the forums, here to review for you! I'm so glad you liked the title I suggested. I definitely think it fits the story. Let's get started!
Characterization: All right. So, we've got Dean, Luna, and Xenophilius here. And I love them all. :D I think you wrote all three of them terrifically. Dean, to begin with, was great. I could imagine him saying all of his dialogue and I loved the way he interacted with Luna and Xeno. Great job. Luna herself was just quirky enough without being obnoxious and over-the-top. I loved that you showed different emotions for her. In my opinion, it really helped to make her more realistic. Xeno was really quite good as well. I liked that you showed the contrast between how he was before Luna forgave him, and after. Spectacular job.
Descriptions: I think you definitely balanced these with the dialogue! I really could see everything happening, and it flowed together so nicely. You didn't leave me hanging when it came to descriptions, and the dialogue wasn't stilted or poorly done. Great balance.
Emotions: You know, this story actually almost brought me to tears. I think I'll favorite it. It's very rare for me to feel the emotions so much that I almost cry, but you pulled that off. When Luna was talking about how her dad had disappointed her, I almost lost it. That was wonderfully written. Really, really great job.
Plot: I think this was so sweet! I've never read a Dean/Luna (at least, not that I remember), and this really showed me that they can be a really sweet couple. I liked it a lot. You took a situation that was never explained in the books and really brought it to life. It was quite realistic. I think you more than pulled it off.
Interactions: As I mentioned, I'd never imagined Dean and Luna together. I LOVE them, now! This was terrific. They were so sweet, but you could tell that neither of them had lost their personality in their relationship. I loved how fiery Luna was when she was upset, but she didn't fly off the handle, which wouldn't have been believable. I think you wrote their relationship in an adorable way. Dean knew that Luna could handle the truth, and she doesn't get her feelings hurt easily, so it meshed really well. And the ending with Luna and Xeno hugging! Awww! :D Loved it.
I think this flowed perfectly. I wasn't confused by the fact that it jumped around. I think you did a terrific job with this. It's rare for me to like a story this much. Great job! (Sorry for my lack of constructive criticism...I just happen to love your story. :] )
Author's Response: Emily! Thank you so much for this amazing review, and for getting here so quickly! (That's something I need to be working on with my reviews, I think :P)
Oh my goodness, what can I say? I am just floored by this review, and all the incredibly sweet things you said :) I'm so happy you like the characters, because I'm really proud of them too (especially Dean. Writing him was shockingly easy for me, and I'm super happy with the result.)
Thanks a lot for clearing up some of my worry about the flow, and also the description/dialogue balance. Those were two things I wasn't quite sure about, and it's great to hear that they worked for you! And I'm so glad you like Dean and Luna as a couple. I just love them together, and I can see them having a lot of really sweet moments :) And I didn't want to stifle either of their personalities, so it's awesome that you noticed that!
It means the world to me that this story brought out those emotions for you! That makes me feel great, and I'm really happy that you enjoyed reading it so much. Thanks again for this wonderful review. Coming from such an awesome writer, it definitely means a lot! You've made my day, for sure! :D