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Review:charlottetrips says:
Hmph, I can’t believe you just left me there!

I like how this story is evolving. It’s totally reading like a fairytale, like one by Diana Wynne Jones. I get a sense that you know everything but are keeping all your cards close. I know, I know, “that’s how all stories are Char”, but it’s got a feeling of more like that. I don’t make any sense I’m sure but I’m just trying to tell you what I’m feeling/thinking while I’m reading this.

Louis is way more geeky and loser-ish in this chapter than he was in the prologue. It’s cool to see how he was in the beginning and how he was at the end of the adventure. It really does show that there was a change involved with him, that experiences do change a man.

Gwenog Jones is an interesting character to put in this. She’s probably much older than Louis and tougher. Her withering stares and such don’t quite make sense to me at this moment, maybe it’s because she knows he was following her as a suspected criminal? Also this really does sound like Louis’ first assignment. Such a blunderer :P

It sounds like one of the Tales of Beetle the Bard caught your attention to form this story, yeah? I always love a good “find the treasure” story. Looking forward to how this develops because I have no idea where we’re going with this.

xChar

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Because the Tales of Beedle the Bard are pretty much wizarding fairytales, I wanted to try and keep that sort of feel in, coz it's all to do with fairytales, you know? I've never read a fairytale by Diana Wynne Jones (I honestly have never heard of her before, lol, and will go and google her as soon as I've responded). No, you do make sense - I think ;)

He is. He really, really is. He's far less mature as well. It's actually really fun writing him, because he's immature and kinda naive and doesn't think and everything.

I spent so long scrolling through the character lists on HP Lexicon to try and find the right characters to put in here, because I wanted a mix of people. She's pretty fun, just because she thinks Louis is a bit of an idiot (she's right) and she's very haughty and confident. Very different to Louis, which I like. Mm... she doesn't know anything about him following her - she thinks he's after the fountain, which is why she's glaring. She wants to get to the fountain for herself and thinks he wants it for the same thing and therefore views him as a rival. I might go back and try and make that clearer...

Yeah, I was itching to start a new WIP and the book was lying on my shelf so innocently... this was the only one which I could remember well enough to think about doing a story around it, and it's so much fun!

Thanks so much for the lovely review! :D

Aph xx

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