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Review:charlottetrips says:
Ha, what a way to pull a reader in! You muse on everything that has to do with Louis but donít really actually give us anything tangible to grab onto, something that would clue as in as to why heís stuck at the desk and his family would be proud of him despite some troublesome thing he was involved in.

Iíve got to hand it to you. Your use of 2nd person POV is always admirable and very effective. I canít help but be drawn into Louisí world and be there with him during the story. You enter in little tidbits like the feathers being stuck in his mouth and to his hand after having rolled the quill in his hands. This makes me connect up with him more in addition to the insight into his thoughts. I loved the part where he realized his thoughts had become deep and insightful all of a sudden. For some reason, thatís the part that had me smiling and then it just got a little funnier after that. I like that itís light and also serious rolled into one. I personally hope that thatís how this story will continue because itís such a good combination.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I wasn't sure when I wrote it if it was too vague, with just nothing at all to interest people, but I'm so glad you think it still pulls people in! :)

Second person is really fun. It's kinda hard to stop now, lol. I tried writing this in third person originally and it just didn't work. At all. Haha, humour is really not my strong suit. Then again, neither is action/adventure-y kind of stuff so this is completely new for me. Hopefully I'll still be able to keep that - we'll see! :D

Thank you so much for this review - it's so absolutely lovely! Thank you! :D

Aph xx

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