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Review:StormThief17 says:
Hi, StormThief here with your review :)

This was very sweet! You can tell how much Dean and Luna care for each other. I like the events out of order, it adds to the story. It ws very smooth, but one sentence was a bit awkward--"But do you mind to come down now". Maybe you could just say"But do you mind coming down now". That would make it easier to read.

Luna did seem a bit out of character. She wasn't so whimsical and random, but that could obviously be a result of the war and not seeing her father. Dean was spot on :)Nice job!

~StormThief17

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for this lovely review, and for coming by so quickly! :)

I'm glad you like the structure of the events, and that you think Dean and Luna work as a couple. That makes me happy! I really enjoyed writing Dean, and I'm glad you like his character.

I definitely see what you mean about Luna here. She's difficult for me to relate to, so I may not have gotten her perfectly. And I'll take another look at that sentence you mentioned.

Thanks for the suggestions, and for the kind words. They mean a lot! :)

--Maggie


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