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Review:SlytheirnXPrincess9 says:
Just noticed your story and can I say that it is actually really good although I do have one thing to suggest. I had the same sort of problem you do by using too much speech. I always used to think lots of speech was key in a story but you also need a suitable amount of descritption to balance it out.

One of my writing friends helped see me through this problem. All I suggest when writing chapters for the story is to use a suitable amount of description to help the reader understand what is going on.

For example (made up on the spot):
"Hermione, you do realise that we are going to have to work together to get the job done," Draco said.
"Yes, I do Malfoy," Hermione said through gritted teeth.
- to me this seems too simple and doesn't give the reader any idea of what is going on like the facial expression of the characters.

Now see the difference when you add a bit of description:
"Hermione, you do realise that we are going to have to work together to get the job done," Draco said.
Hermione stood there staring straight at Malfoy. To her he seemed to think that they could get along but she certainly thought otherwise. This was the boy who had always called her a mudblood or any other name under the sun and he was now trying to make up for it but she wasn't going to let it happen that easily.
"Yes, I do Malfoy," Hermione said through gritted teeth.

I hope that you don't think this comment was too harsh or anything. Believe me when I say description really helps and will soon be your new best friend. Maybe read other Dramione stories and see how the writers write their stories. This way you should be able to pick a few pointers from them and you will be able to see the balance of speech and description :D xx

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