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Review:Aqua Sulis says:
Well, I missed this chapter when it was posted which is why I am just now reviewing it instead of when it was posted. Sorry to keep you waiting. I want to thank you for the length of the chapter. I was able to take my time reading it and made it last for the entire day which was very nice. The next one I will probably blow through rather quickly so you may or may not get another review from me tonight.
Anywho, I loved the chapter and was very happy to get to know the entire story instead of relying on my conjectures. I really liked Jo's character development in this chapter and how we got to see so much more of who she was before everything happened. I don't know if I like or dislike little Jo not because of the whole James thing but because of her personality. She is a very smart and complex character which I like about her. I kind of wish there was more of Albus in her story just because I want to know what they were like together in Hogwarts, but I understand it was not pertinent to the story she was telling. Anywho, I loved it and am very excited for the next chapter which I am going to start reading right now.

Author's Response: Thanks!!

I had actually thought about dividing the chapter into two or three parts but then decided against it because it was mess up my James/Jo POV pattern.

I'm glad it turned out well. I wrote the last half in one night with the help of a pot of coffee and three monsters and all because my best friend wanted to read THE chapter 8 before we went our seprerate ways for summer. I was compleatally burnt out.

I knew pretty early that i was going to have to have a "flashback" chapter but i wasn't going to just throw them in there haphazardly. Maybe i take writing fics a bit more seriously than most, but it anoyes me when people just head a section as **Flashback** and then rattle off. There are so many other ways to frame it... oh well... besides, as i have said many times before, what happened in the past is important but not as important as effects of it and i knew that, had i told that part of the story too soon, it would have became what the whole story was about in the minds of many readers.

I'm at the same point with little Jo. I mean I don't really dislike her, but I don't like her either. She's just not as interesting as big Jo (maybe Alex has rubbed off on her, lol).

Don't feel so bad about Al not having a bigger part--there really wasn't much for him to do then. Now, however, he's got a big part and I even have at least one "interlude" chapter planed entirely in his POV. That one was fun, and if you really pay attention (and i mean SUPPER closely) you might just pick up a bread crumb or two for the sequel.


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