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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
As usual, your descriptions of the setting are fantastic. Very vivid. I still love how you tie everything together between the muggle and wizarding world. You always relate one to the other and I think that continuity is helpful in reminding us how integrated they are, especially in this story.

Grindelwald is all together frightening and kind of awe-inspiring to see the command he has over his men. You did a great job introducing the men who worked for him. I think adding those small details about each men really re-enforced, to me at least, how dangerous these men are. Yet despite their accomplishments, they're still intimidated by Grindelwald. Also, interesting that he took on the Deathly Hallows symbol.

It was nice to see Dumbledore back in Hogwarts, in familiar territory. I think you made great observations about him, especially with the idea of him recruiting because I always imagined him doing so again during the first wizarding war. The only concern with this part, though, was the introduction of the opening of the Chamber of Secrets. It was a great idea to mention it - I completely forgot this occurred around this time! Bu t it just seemed sort of rushed, I guess? I don't know how else to describe it. I guess I wished there was a bit moredialogue between Dumbledore and Slughorn about the incident.

As usual, I love the interactions between Evans and his men. His humor is great - I love his little comment about the British Museum that no one else laughed at, and I love how the men tease him about Daisy. It's such a natural, casual relationship they have. It's great. I bet having Daisy with them will be interesting, indeed. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Author's Response: Welcome back yet again!

This opening was pretty fun to write, since we know almost nothing from canon about Grindlwald's followers, I enjoyed being able to mak up names and backstories for them, and to expand upon their failrly obvious tis to the nazis.

I know what you mean about the chamber of secrets part, and that was a prtty tricky issue for me to figure out how to include it. It's really not important to this story so I didn't want to dwell on it, but at th same time it was happening at this time in canon, so I felt like I couldn't ignore it completely.

And now the gang is heading to Greece, I hope you enjoy the next chapter!


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