First of all, I'd like to say that I find the whole idea of someone travelling forwards in time, rather than backwards, really interesting. Time-travel is always a tricky subject (I've always been too scared to write it, lol), but particularly when going forwards, I think, so I'm impressed you've done that ;)
I really like Scorpius' character. He seems very real - I like how even though he's a Slytherin he's not a complete coward or a wimp or anything like that - but, at the same time, he's not a genius or amazingly brave. He seems like a nice medium, which is good. Also, his point of view was lovely - the way he internalised pretty much everything and didn't speak at all during the chapter (except in the flashback) really hammered home the points you made about the 'Malfoy rules': don't talk, don't make noise, etc. I'm really curious to see what you do with Scorpius - how you make him 'grown-up', so to speak and how he develops as a character. At the moment, he seems like a pretty average teenage boy, albeit with perhaps a slightly different set of problems to other teenagers, what with the whole family issue thing, lol.
I thought Draco and Astoria were really good as well. I've never read them like that before - so quiet and adherring exactly to the rules and things. It's almost like they're both scared to stick out and be in any way noticeable within their own home, which is actually kinda sad - and not just for Scorpius. It's also a logical progression for Draco after the war, too, not wanting to stick out and be noticed and things. While it's unusual characterisation, I really like it. It fits. I hope we see more of them later on, since their characters and relationship seems so interesting and mysterious-like at the moment :P
Ah, the plot! Where to begin? Like I said above, the whole idea of going forwards in time instead of backwards is really fascinating. I'm really curious to see how Scorpius develops, how the future unravells in front of him and what he learns from it (coz he must learn something, right? :D). Even if nothing much changed at all, I imagine this would still be a really intruiging story, so it should be even better with stuff actually changing ;)
I'll definitely have to keep an eye out for you again in the review battle ;)
Author's Response: Time-travel is definitely a tricky subject and writing this story has been really tricky/mind-blowing, so I'm really glad to hear I haven't completed muddled things up.
And you like my characters so far...hooray! I think Draco and Astoria are really interesting and I'm a little sad this story is so Scorpius-centric and they don't play a bigger role, because they are a lot of fun to write about.
Hopefully I'm doing a good job of making Scorpius develop as a character in the later chapters.
He does learn something (lots of somethings, actually!) but I guess you'll see if you encounter me again in the review battle.
Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate you putting so much time and effort into it (: