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Review:caoty says:
One of the things I like about this piece is the pace. It's fast and frantic, and it matches its setting well.

However, there is a bit to be improved; mostly stylistic and characterisation stuff. There are a fair few typos and probably more commas than you should have used, and while this does at to the breathless pace, it sometimes does seem a bit clumsy. That's not anything a good proofread can't fix, though. On Remus' characterisation: I don't know, I don't see him as the type for despair and heroics, as in canon he comes across as an extremely controlled man, even at the climax of PoA, which would probably be almost as traumatic for him as Tonks' death. I'm also personally not convinced that Tonks is the only woman he's ever loved; as he's in his thirties when he marries her, and he's not *that* socially awkward, there probably would have been someone else at some point. This might just be me, though, because I am the world's biggest Remus/Sirius shipper. But anyway.

Overall, there is room for improvement, but the concept in itself is great, and you chose an interesting character to work with. Good luck in the challenge. :)

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