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Review:Slide says:
I was trying to not read this at breakneck speed, and all the time as we got up to Dumbledore's office was thinking "If she ends this on a cliffhanger, I'm going to kill her. If she ends this on a cliffhanger, I'm going to kill her." So, it's time to go hire some ninjas. Nothing personal!

I AM STILL NOT CONVINCED. This could be a bluff, OR there could be more than one spy, OR or or. Theories. So many. But it will not be simple, oh no. Ivy's definitely evil. NEXT chapter may blow me out of the water on this one, but I will stick to my crazy! It REASSURES me. Either way, I am so super eager for more.

Of what there IS, it's tasty. Poor, angsty Gideon, but at least he seems to partly realise blaming Araminta is not quite reasonable, though he's entitled to a bit of illogical thought in his grief. That he recognises that she's good for him, even if he's not necessarily in a state to do much/anything about it right now, is a positive, positive sign.

UNLESS SHE'S EVIL.

I must also particularly commend you on describing particular things which are familiar to the reader but not to the character, like the entrance to Dumbledore's office. It's such a NOTABLE entranceway that it seems wrong to just skim over it when seeing it for the first time, but equally, you didn't excessively linger on it and make the reader feel like they were just treading well-worn ground. Even if I was trying to stop myself from reading at a rate of a mile a minute at that point.

I would love to read the next chapter, but alas, I have some ninjas to hire. Except then I'll never see the next chapter. Hmm. No ninjas. FOR NOW.

Author's Response: I'd firstly like to remind you of the many instances in which you have used the cliffhanger device. Just saying. Bring on the ninjas!

MY LIPS REMAIN SEALED because it amuses me that I know what happens and you don't. HA. But yes, the next chapter will (I hope!) answer some, if not all, of your questions. Course, it may leave you asking more as well, we shall see. But it is big, and juicy, and written, and in the process of being edited, and then I'll post it once I'm satisfied that I've drawn out the suspense for long enough.

Gideon partly sees that Araminta is good for him, yes. But in a way she's so good for him that she's bad. And he recognises this too, and doesn't want to end up madly in love with someone who (in his eyes) doesn't return the sentiment at all. Last time he loved someone he lost her and he doesn't want to go through all that again. So he's in a bit of a sticky situation, bless him. And it's only going to get worse in the short term ... I'm cruel like that.

I'm AWFUL when it comes to description. I get totally carried away with the dialogue, and then go 'hang on, this is a bit lacking...' So this was a deliberate effort to include a mention of the environment because Dumbledore's office is Quite Something, and it would seem very amiss if Araminta weren't to notice anything of it, even given the mental state she's in. So I am Very Glad that you like, because it means I did it right. :)

Thanks for reviewing!


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