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Review:maskedmuggle says:
Wow.. that was so.. chilling! I was drawn in by the summary - it's just one sentence but it makes me so intrigued to know what happened to him! I thought this was great - you I liked how you gradually built up to the plot. I'm not sure why Death Eaters are so careless as to leave a door ajar :P but apart from that, I thought you had nice characterisation through the Death Eater dialogue.

I thought the end was definitely surprising, but I think you could have made it even more dramatic somehow? And developed it just a bit more? It makes me wonder why Caradoc didn't just apparate away (though I guess he could have been frozen in fright, and he is young? careless and wanting revenge so..) I would have loved more emotions and thoughts at the end especially. Nevertheless, I really enjoyed reading this - I've never read about Caradoc and exploring a character gone missing is so interesting! Oh, and the ending with the Daily Prophet article was a nice finish :) Lovely writing! :)

Author's Response: Ahh, thank you! I wrote it for a 'Leave the end up the readers imagination' challenge, which is why it ends as it does. But I see what you mean about adding more emotion, etc. though. I'll go back and have a look. :)

And I'm so happy you liked the summary! I was brainstorming for ages then when I was flicking through the wiki for the original phoenix members I came across the quote. It's perfect, and i'm so glad that someone else finds it intriguing! It was my first shot at mystery/suspense so i'm thrilled you liked it. XD

I can't believe you left me two reviews! Ahh, defiantly made my day. ^_^

- Adele. :)

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