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Review:classicblack says:
Oh yes they can Lily. And they will. Your friends will keep you inside that room for days (okay, maybe I'm being a bit meldramatic) if necessary. However, I love the way you end your chapters. Just the right amount of suspense mixed with finis.

Wow. Lily found out Remus was a werewolf! Can't wait to see the direction you take that in. I can bet it's going to be interesting. Why would it be in James's file, though? Dumbledore didn't know about the Marauders being Animaguses and so wouldn't the information more likely be in Remus's file?

Oh my gosh, I chuckled dryly (yes, again) when Sir Richard flirted with Professor McGonagall! That was so funny and I loved how you gave life to some of the less-recognized members of Hogwarts: the suits of armour. Next, you'll have to feature some paintings. The foreshadowing in the last chapters to that point was really well done, as well.

A thing to improve on: add more events to each chapter. I like short chapters, but I feel like not much happens in each one.

One thing I like about your writing is that you remian completely omniscient. You don't focus on one character's thoughts. You show all of them almost all the time. I feel like so many authors try and fail to do this, but you don't.

As always, great chapter.
Happy writing,
classicblack

Author's Response: Gosh what a fantastic review! Thank you for pointing out what I'm doing well and giving me some constructive feedback. I definitely recognised that I needed to add more stuff each chapter so have been doing so :) Hopefully they're not getting TOO long now haha.

To answer your question - I did have to do a little research before I wrote that in and read an interview with JK herself where she said it was quite likely that Dumbledore and McGonagall knew completely about them being Animagi (therefore I reasoned there was some kind of security and action plan in Remus's file to do with him being a werewolf - gosh, can you tell I work in Education?!). Hopefully that's a good enough explanation haha.

On to your next wonderful review and thank you!!


T


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