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Review:classicblack says:
"And so James very quickly threw a long silk cloak around himself and slipped behind a suit of armour. To anyone watching him specifically, they would have been surprised to find he had suddenly and effectively disappeared from sight." Wow, I think every chapter has a least one line that I'm extremely impressed with. Loved the way you introducted the invisibility cloak! Just had to add that before continuing to read the chapter... (by the way, I've got to say I loved the opening to this chapter- very attention-getting and creative. Okay seriously, I'll finish reading now...)

Just a minor correction: the Room of Requirement doesn't show up on the Marauders Map.

So... wow. Just wow. Go James. Honestly, I'd be a bit flattered if a bloke beat up a twit I was dating for me. 'Course, it'd take me a while to believe that he did it for the right reasons and I might question his sanity for a bit, but I'd be flattered all the same. I loved how you tied this into Lily and James's eventual love. Can't wait to see how you tie that part in altogether- what with Lily sealing her fate and all.

You have a great way of introducing key points about Hogwarts/ the Marauders Era (i.e. Map, Room, and Cloak).

I'm still left wondering about Vale's involvement with Gray. Hope that's elaborated on more in the next chapters.

Oh Remington. What is her involvement in all this? Really. One minute I think she likes James and then the next she's telling him that she'll tell Lily what really happened. Honestly, what is with this girl?! I hope to figure her out soon.

I love your drescription of the beginning of Lily's mixed feelings for James.

Fantastic chapter!
Happy writing,
classicblack

Author's Response: Ooh really? Thankyou! By the way, I love the fact that you review as you go along - it makes the feedback so much more relevant.

And oh my goodness, you are so right! Why didn't I pick up on that? Why hasn't anyone else picked up on that! I shall change it when I go through and give each chapter an image. Thanks love!

Umm I should probably say it now...Remington you won't figure out until the very last chapter. Purely because I've written her that way! She's a complex character who I've spent a lot of time on and I can't wait to see what you think when you eventually read it!

Thankyou so much for all your feedback and encouragement! You are a wonderful reviewer!


T


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