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Review:Pixileanin says:
"The impending doom will hit me in a month or so. Until then, the adulthood can kiss my smooth behind."

This. *points up* Was priceless.

You have a smooth writing style that is so pleasant to read. I really enjoyed this chapter all the way through. Your opening scene pulled me into the story without bogging me down in the details of where you were coming from, and I appreciate that so much. Your characters show us who they are too. I like Tam and her easy way of moving through the scene. Her casual brushes with the other canon characters are very well done.

Breezy even.

I especially liked the commentary on diversion tactics and the subsequent usage of said tactics by Tam. Both with the luggage and with Luis. Having him be the one using Veela trickery was extremely interesting, not that I was sure he actually was using it. But the thought of a male Veela... I just never thought of that before. It was fresh and new and excited me somehow.

Your choice to use the "sloshing sound and a faint hiss" was enough of a clue as to what was in the trunk. You kept it mysterious and of course I want to know what is inside!

Well done on the first chapter! I would love to hang out and see the next one... oops. I guess I'll have to wait for it.

A great read!

Author's Response: Yay! Thank you. It's so fun to read which parts of the story readers like.

This chapter was very quick and easy to write, since it's more a cute summer story and has lighter plot than my other WIPs. Apparently it shows.

Tam is definitely growing on me. She's the most impulsive of my OC girls, but in a way it's very refreshing. She and Louis, well it remains to be seen, which part of it is just chemistry and which part trickery... ;)

Thank you for reading it. So cool for you to stop by. =)


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