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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there!

Here again with another review.

I feel so horrible for Josh! What a lot to go through being only two and then eleven/twelve. I liked how he wanted to start explaining before school started what had happened so he knew how he was going to feel and what he was going to say. It shows his growth. You even show his growth really well with his last line of the chapter. I also thought Greg was really well characterized in this chapter too. You could almost see the gears literally turning in his mind about how Slytherins stick together to We all stick together. Everyone can relate to these two characters this is why I enjoy reading about them so much!

I thought that the flow was again smooth and the pace steady. They are well balanced with the description. I see no areas where you slowed down or where I felt confused. The description is so awesome! You just have this wonderful way with words that bring the world your imagining come to life for those who read. The other awesome thing that you do is you avoid said at all costs. I've never read this many stories that have refrained in using that one simple word. It really does wonders to a story because of it. You're able to bring out the emotions easier and make them not only relatable but believable.

Keep up the awesome writing! =)

-SR17

Author's Response: Like I said, Josh has to grow up quickly. Poor kid. I guess this is what happens when characters appear out of nowhere and I have to invent a backstory for them - it all gets a bit tragic.

As for said, well, I do think I get a bit OCD about it sometimes. Although I suppose Theo tells everyone what his rugby coach always said enough times to make up for my aversion to its presence in the narrative.

Thanks as always

Sheriff :)


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