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Review:patroni says:
I usually wait until the end/last updated chapter to review but I can't reign in my excitement! Your story is BRILLIANT. It's new, gripping, utterly convincing, and very, very well thought out and executed. I absolutely love the idea of Hogwarts as a kind of dystopia- not virulent, but simmering, creeping. I caught on to the idea quite fast- the moment the Secrecy classes were mentioned, but I had an inlking even before that; I can't wait to see what happens next.

Really, this is superb writing. You haven't overdone a thing; your Albus and Cassie may be brave but they're not unnaturally so- dashing around heroically, raging against the machine. They're not caricatures of the rebellion and I'm so grateful for that. I like the sound of James too, from the five sentences I've heard from him! And I'm so impressed by how, even in a taut, tense plot, you've put in moments that are light and funny: the portraits speaking in the Headmaster's office and, in this chapter, the hilarious exchange between Harry and James (and Ron) about the map.

Two suggestions: 1. Some of your chapter titles are taken from songs- I identified a few but I'm guessing there's more. Just for copyright reasons- I'm not accusing you of plagiarism or anything!- you could mention the sources in your Author's Notes. 2. On a similar point, how about using a line from Pink Floyd's Another Brick in the Wall, part II? :)

I haven't been this excited about a plot in ages; you're onto something really fresh and new here so I'm warning you now, I'll keep badgering you until you finish this. Thank you for sharing it- and congratulations!

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