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Review:PenguinsWillReignSupreme says:
This really makes me want to give this challenge another shot (after accidentally deleting my 500 word story :P ). I know how difficult it is to write in so few words and I think you did a beautiful job with this.

It's subtle but not in a confusing way. It was very clear who it was and obviously we know what happened between them but I love stories that deal with this particular moment in the Marauders' era. It's often done appallingly but I think you really pulled off the emotion necessary.

Lily's sadness was heartbreaking and the last few sentences really hit home. I think the change in what she thinks of him as - Severus, the friend; Snape, the Death Eater - was particularly striking and helps to emphasise how much of a turning point that moment was.

Your style is very consistent too, coming to this after reviewing 'Whispers in the Night', which is obviously very important from a writing perspective. The pain comes across really well and it really is horrible to think of Lily going through as much as she has in terms of this friendship, as well as the implications this moment has for their futures.

I think this is a wonderful one-shot and you've done really well with the aftermath of such an important moment in the books.

Author's Response: 500 is hard and I'm not exactly pleased with how this whole thing turned out, i've probably edited and changed it 4 times now but i haven't been able to get it in my mind. But i am pleased that you enjoyed it anyway. Lily has always been elusive to me this moment never really added up in my head for some reason. I was trying to explain it to myself.

I'm pleased you got it because i've gotten quite a few mixed reviews about it being too confusing, however, i've changed somethings to try and make the point a little clearer. I'm pleased that you got how big of a turning point this was because it's easy to ignore things coming from someone you don't know, like a stranger tell you you are stupid or something it's easy to laugh it off or simply not believe them because what do they know? But when your friend, your best friend tells you you're stupid or a Mudblood it hurts more because of all that emotional garbage you have to deal with but also you believe it to an extent. Lily realized who she was to most of the world, that she was lower than trash and that she lost her very best friend, there is only so far a friendship will go with such differing beliefs and perhaps she realized she could no longer save him.

Anyway thanks for all of your reviews! They really mean a lot to me, you did not have to review so many as a form of an apology though life gets way too busy sometimes, happens to me all the time, however i do appreciate every one that you gave. =D

-zayne

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