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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
I was a little turned off by the length of the chapter, which is funny considering how long my chapters tend to be, but I think the best part about your writing is that you're a great storyteller. The chapter just flies by with action.

So, I kind of love Reynolds, a lot. Lassoing the scorpion and destroying the ruby on the sceptor because he used to shoot at wombats back home. He's kind of awesome that way.

Once again, I really enjoy the mixture of magic and history - using concealment spells to get through enemy lines and the combination of using spells and rifles to do what needs to be done.

I was really concerned when the scorpion stung Dumbledore and then the men were left defenseless against another wizard. When Meisterberger stole the sceptor, I was worried that their mission was all for naught. I guess I shouldn't discount Dumbledore and his men - they work together very well.

We're moving things along now. Great chapter. I can't wait to read the rest to see what else Dumbledore can manage to do to chip away at Grindelwald and Hitler's defenses.

Author's Response: The more action packed chapters seem to end up being a little longer, but i hope it didn't drag at all!

Reynolds is so much fun to write, in real life a significant portion of the British Long Range Desert Group wer from Aus and NZ, so I wanted to reflect that, and he's there for some comic relief as well.

This was the first major conflict of the story, but there's plenty more to come and i hope you enjoy the rest of it!

Thanks a lot for the reviews!

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