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Review:GrangerDanger76 says:
“Counting myself, I knew exactly how many people were willing to miss the first five minutes of breakfast to haul themselves to McGonagall’s office and speak into a microphone.

That number is one.”

Pretty sure you are a goddess.

The end.

You should be really proud of your editing (or beta if you have one) because I can never find errors. The only thing I found is so minor I shouldn’t even bother pointing out but
whatever…

“’Anyway, Breezeley,” he said, leaning one shoulder against the door, “I’ve got a proposition for you.” He waited for my reaction, but I didn’t deign to give him one; this situation smelled fishier by the second. Snake Boy cleared his throat a bit awkwardly and pushed on.

“Anyway. Look, next weekend’s the first big match – exactly a week from today, actually. You know that.’”

In the second paragraph the second anyway doesn’t really flow. I personally think it would sound better if the second anyway is removed.

Does that make any sense?

Probably not :)

Author's Response: Oh, I love that line, and hardly anyone's pointed it out! :D I'm no goddess, but I do play one on television, so... *ducks rotten tomatoes* And that's what I mean about my humor sometimes falling short!

True story -- I rarely, rarely edit my work, and even more rarely do I get it beta'd. So that's a really high compliment to hear, actually -- thanks so much! And word repetitiveness is something I'm perhaps the worst at catching; I do most of the time, but, of course, that slips through. I've taken your suggestion and changed it!

These reviews. They are lovely. ♥ Thanks so much for coming back and doing this for me!!


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