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Review:distantgalaxy says:
Hi :) this is the review you requested!

To start with, (this usually wouldn't be the very first thing that I say in a review, but it is extremely distracting) you really really need to proof read before posting your story and maybe even get a beta from the forums (that is someone who proofreads your story for you, can be found in the help section). There are A LOT of spelling mistakes that are so distracting I couldn't pay attention to the story. Especially in the summary. I've fixed your summary for you: "What would happen if Sirius Black wasn't dead? What would happen if a new Black member arrived? What would happen if Harry fell for the new Black girl!? Would the godfather/godson relationship be damaged? Read to find out!!"

I do like the plot, it's interesting that Sirius has a daughter. However, it's odd that she just tells the trio that she doesn't know why Sirius never mentioned her. Is this meant to be part of the plot? Like she is lying or does she just not care? You may want to elaborate a little bit more about this in your first chapter.

So just make sure to fix your grammar mistakes because you certainly have an interesting story happening here :)

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